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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smart phones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Technology has brought about increasing insights through mobile devices and computers all over the globe. It is
also
 believed that the availability of the world wide web is without charge. On one hand,
this
 is beneficial to the society chiefly because knowledge is power and even more, a platform that enables
someone
any person
anyone
 to easily have
access
 to
ideas
Suggestion
the ideas
 he would
otherwise
 not have in his immediate environment is emancipating.
On the other hand
, there are negative exposures that could emanate from the internet.
This
 essay will
thus
 discuss the benefits and detriments of
access
 to electronic information. To start with, classrooms now have no boundaries because of the internet and it is possible for someone in a remote village in Nigeria
for instance
 to have a real-time online tutorial on the production of engines with a tutor in China. Even more, in some climes, the residents do not even need to pay to
access
 it.
This
 would in turn allow people to
further
 their learning which will
also
 transform to a better educated and more prosperous society. The negative side effects to an unencumbered
access
 to information online is that a lot of people will take advantage of it to fuel evil instincts that could
otherwise
 have been remained latent. An instance is where a boy
that is
 not older than twelve out of boredom decides to play around on his smartphone and
then
 encounters a pornographic material he should not know about until he is older and wiser. Another instance is where an innocent religious girl is deluded by some extremist members of an insurgent group on twitter to join them in perpetuating violence and
also
 run away from her family. These are just a few of the negative impacts of online activities. To conclude, while the benefits of of electronic interactions can be tremendous, there is a need by the government to place adequate restrictions on how these activities play out to discourage negative influences and occurrences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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