Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Learning is not only an
integeral
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
integral
part of our day to day activity, but
also
very important for the students who are the future of tomorrow. Some say that the money spent on the education of children does provide them with
facts but
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facts, but
not with any practical
skillset
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skill set
, to which I definitely agree. It's like a race and each individual is trying to be
first
,
moreover they
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moreover, they
are like people with no desire to learn something out of the box or practical.
Instead
of going out
to
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of
the ground and getting their hands dirty, the pupils think their hard work is well deserved staring at the books. The universities charge extra money and
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
provide facts which are printed in a decade old book, which the kids can
also
google and can get better answers.
For example
, a study found that 40% of the schools in the UK have students, who are introverts as are not exposed to the broader aspect of study.
Initially
the schools and universities were made so that the youngsters can gain vast knowledge,
however
now they have become just a profit making business. The students are nobody's concern, till everybody is getting paid
with
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by
the same old book why to do something different. The Kids who are smart understand and opt for better places and grow as an individual, while the other stay in
same situation
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the same situation
.
For instance
, a study in India stated that only 10% of the students
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
practical knowledge before their
first
job, which is generally around 22 years. In conclusion, the
education
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educational
bodies are not changing anytime soon, the parents and their offsprings have to do a proper
reasearch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
before thinking of some real education.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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