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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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Introduction
We now live in a digital era where the conventional ways of communications have been completely replaced by social media sites. Social media platforms,
such
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 as
Facebook
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 and Instagram, have gained considerable popularity among people in the
last
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 decade. Some people are now arguing that the social sites invasion has a drastically negative effect on both the individuals and the
society
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.
Although
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 there are many drawbacks that came with the introduction of social media, I strongly agree that the benefits are to surplus the disadvantages.
Body paragraph 1
Social media networks can be so beneficial if used properly by individuals. While physical meetings are sometimes not possible, social sites can be used to virtually connect people with their loved ones.
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, they can keep individuals alerted of what is occurring around them
.
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.
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, I just moved to a new city and I am fully aware of the events that are taking place around me, thanks to
Facebook
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.
In addition
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 to the social side of these benefits, Social websites can help individuals grow professionally as well.
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 is made possible because of all the career events and job postings that are advertised periodically.
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Not only that social media sites can have some remarkable benefits
on
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to
for
 individuals, but they can
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 have more value to the
society
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. Sharing public opinion about current issues, reporting incidents and spreading awareness through digital campaigns are just
few examples
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a few examples
 of how social media can be enormously beneficial to the
society
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.
For example
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, Egypt has successfully planned a revolution solely through using
Facebook
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. If it was not for
Facebook
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, the country could have been still suffering of dictatorship till
this
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 day.
Conclusion
In conclusion, social media networks can be viewed as a double-edged weapon. Despite having obvious negative impacts, their gain still dominates. In my opinion, I strongly disagree that social media networks are of bad impact to the individuals and the
society
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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