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Band 7.5

An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Maria,

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Dear Maria, How are you? I am so happy to hear that you are planning to spend a two-week holiday in my region. It will be wonderful to see you again after
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 a long time. Don't worry about the accommodation, as I would be happy to help you to find a comfortable place to stay . In fact, there is a lovely guest house near my house
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 affordable, clean, and close to the city centre. There are many interesting places to visit in my area. I would definitely recommend visiting the local museum, red fort, and the beautiful lakeside park. Since you are visiting in the winter season, don't forget to pack some warm and cosy sweaters because the temperature generally drops at night. Comfortable walking shoes would
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 be useful because we will probably do a lot of sightseeing. I am really looking forward to meeting you soon. Best wishes, Marie

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Add one more clear idea about where I can stay.
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Say a bit more about what we can do in the area.
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Make each part a little longer with one more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like and, also, because, so.
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Keep one main idea in each part.
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Check small word form and space errors.
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You answer all parts of the task.
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The tone is warm and right for a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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