It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Technology has transformed the world from primitive to advanced one.
However
, I disagree with
this
view, that older culture acts as conflict towards the new advancement, but
this
is not the case. Some people argue that, technology captured the whole world.
This
is true to some extent, nowadays, job opportunities being open globally, people tend to migrate towards western developed countries to earn and secure themselves financially. Due to
this
migration they try to follow the western lifestyle and
this
has spread all over due to which traditional attire in eastern parts has taken aback.
On the contrary
,
this
advancement has
also
given us the chance to re-visit our histories, cultures, languages through many websites.
Furthermore
,
this
type of invention helps us to store the required vital information regarding our culture.
For instance
,
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,
Many of the traditional languages are getting extinct, but these can be learnt and preserved on websites.
However
, I disagree with the idea of wearing traditional attire has fallen back in eastern parts of the world. In India during festivals or even during any occasion females still prefer to wear traditional clothes gracefully like saree and
also
celebrate festivals in the traditional pattern by taking
in
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into
account all the rituals associated with them.
This
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This, also
also
, creates a path to transfer the cultural knowledge to the future generations.
Therefore
, these values can be kept in existence and make our roots stronger.
Secondly
, in olden
times families
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times, families
were staying
together which
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together, which
is still present in many parts of India.
Lastly
, traditional value
such
as respect to one another and
elders
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elder
is
been
the state or fact of existing
being
nurtured globally. To conclude, technology is a necessary part of human existence and I believe traditional culture should be given more importance.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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