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Some people say a person’s success in adult life is the result of the way they were brought up as a child by their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that a person’s
success
 in adult
life
 is a result of upbringing they received. I do not quite agree with
this
 view. In my opinion, the
success
 of a person is very much a result of their hard work and perseverance. Upbringing is certainly important, but just because a child is brought up well, there is no guarantee that they will be successful in their adult
life
.
Although
 parents are the ultimate teachers and guides of a child, many people grow up either without their parents or against their parents’ principles. Quite a few people learn to live
life
 or make it big in
life
 without family support or help. There have been many
such
success
 stories.
For example
, many wealthy businessmen on the Wall Street were orphans; yet they earned
success
 from scratch. Talent, skills and hard work coupled with experience are important factors in any successful individual’s
life
. People grow from their experiences or situations
.
Accept space
.
Their
success
 depends upon their ability to learn from their mistakes.
Life
 choices
also
 play a prime role in shaping an individual’s
success
 path.
For example
, the friends or company we keep could affect our
life
Suggestion
lives
 tremendously. To conclude, no matter whether an individual is born with a silver spoon in their mouth or to wealthy parents, ultimately it is their perseverance and hard work that
take
Suggestion
takes
 them to places. Upbringing is certainly
important but
Accept comma addition
important, but
 it is not the only factor that determines a person’s chances of
success
 in
life
.
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