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LOGGING OF THE RAINFOREST IS A SERIOUS PROBLEM AND MAY LEAD TO THE EXTINCTION OF ANIMAL LIFE AND HUMAN LIFE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

#rainforest #extinction #life
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With the increasing human population and demand for more food and residential areas, there has been a sudden increase in
deforestration
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deforestation
, On the one
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 humans are developing more and more concrete buildings resulting in the cutting down of
trees
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, Which will result in the death of many species.
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 essay will shed some light on what effect logging down the rainforest has on the world and why it should be stopped. Deforestation can cause significant issues,
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 as climate change and the extinction of insects, birds, animals and more living organisms. A lion, an apex predator, can only survive only if the food chain of that jungle is complete. To cite an example, if we divide forests in India, the tiger reserves, where a tiger survives, have been reduced to an extent because of the lesser number of
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 and less area for the predators, which need a larger area to live. A forest report by Jim Corbett National Park suggested that a tiger needs a minimum of 200 KM of jungle area to live.
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, Human life is dependent on all other creatures. As we cut more and more
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 in the name of development, the effects will be irreversible.
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, humans have started plantation campaigns to grow
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 and preserve nature. But, it takes a significant amount of time for a plant to grow fully.
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, it is not an
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 job to grow a forest
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nature is very important. To exemplify, A report from the Times of India in 2017 suggested that over 20% of animals and organisms might become extinct
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 century. In conclusion, the Destruction of natural resources for human benefits in the short term will create irreversible problems, and
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, I support the fact that deforestation should stop and the world should focus solely on sustainability so that the upcoming generation survives and lives a happy and healthier life.
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