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In many countries small shops and town centers are going out of business because people tend to drive to the large-out-of town stores. This results to an increase in car use and it also means that people without cars have limited access to out of the town stores. Do you think the advantages of such development outweigh its disadvantages?

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It is irrefutable that large-out-of
town
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 stores are gradually taking over
town
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centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
 and small shop due to various reasons which will be discussed in
this
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 essay.
Personally i
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Personally, I
Personally I
 believe that the merits of shopping in out-of-
town
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 stores outweigh its demerits.
Firstly
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,
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,
the prices of goods in out-of
town
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 stores are cheaper and there are
variety
Suggestion
a variety
varieties
 of goods to meet the needs of their clients.
This
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 is a way of luring more customers amidst the distant location of the store.
Secondly
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,
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,
most times people who
cant
can not
can't
 afford to take their families on trips may go on
weekend trip
Suggestion
a weekend trip
weekend trips
the weekend trip
 to out of
town
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 malls to have a different experience about
shopping
Suggestion
the shopping
.
Thirdly
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, there is a reduced investment in the city
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 and it
also
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 contributes to urban sprawl of cities.
Finally
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, since the shops are mostly located far away from
town
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,
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,
development
equally moves
Suggestion
is equally moving
 to
this
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 area and in turn prices of land and buildings appreciate. Out-of
town
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 shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
 is known to cause so much traffic on the road.
Also
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, those without transport are disenfranchised.
Therefore
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, shopping is limited to only those who own a car. Again, some might argue that it creates
job but
Suggestion
jobs, but
jobs but
 really it shifts employment
form
a giver or sender
from
 one area to the other. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that out of
town
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 malls have more advantages than disadvantages.
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