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some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundation subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides.

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Teaching mathematics at
school
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 is often debatable among parents.
some
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Some
 parents
believe
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Believe
 it is no more needed while other parents believe it should be included in their syllabus as a foundational
subject
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This
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in depth. There are growing number of opinions on teaching mathematics in
school
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. Some parents believe that it is unimportant and should be removed. They have
reason
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 because calculations are becoming more
teadious so
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tedious, so
tedious so
, that can be solved by computers or calculators. A university of
melbourne
the capital of Victoria state and 2nd largest Australian city; a financial and commercial center
Melbourne
 professor says that "90 percentage of calculations can be solved by using computers". These parents have good
reason
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 to believe that mathematics is no longer a relevant
subject
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 in
school
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.
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 to the parents who believe it is unimportant to learn mathematics in
school
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 there are some parents who believe it should be remained in
school
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 curriculum. They have
reason
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 because learning mathematics increases cognitive
skills particularly
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skills, particularly
 at
an
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a
 young age. Recent implication done by university of
calgary
the largest city in southern Alberta; an oil and gas center and a technology center for Alberta and most of western Canada
Calgary
 professor says that "the logical thinking is high for the students who do mathematics regularly". These parents have good
reason
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 to believe that it should
included
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include
 in their syllabus as a fundamental
subject
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. Some parents believe that learning mathematics at
school
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 is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational
subject
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 whether or not it is used later in life. A number of parents believe that
it
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It
 is unimportant and should be removed while other parents believe that it
should
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Should
 be taught at
school
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.
This
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 essay discussed the various reasons why parents hold these views and whether mathematics should remain a part of students
school
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studies
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study
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