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Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree?

#air #travel #pollution
Some people believe that the only way to reduce
air
pollution
 is to limit the number of flights. I do not agree with
this
 view. In my opinion, restricting
air
travel
 is unlikely to have any real impact on
air
 quality. At the same time, it may adversely affect the economy of the nation. There is no denying the fact that aeroplanes cause
air
 and noise
pollution
. They produce too much noise and emit harmful gases. While it is possible to control
this
pollution
 by reducing the number of flights, it will not fully solve the problem because the majority of pollutants in the
air
 do not come from aircrafts. It is true that
air
travel
 has become more affordable and popular recently.
However
, aeroplanes still are not the primary mode of transport for the majority of people and as
such
 they cannot be considered the number one cause of
air
pollution
. In fact, cars and buses cause more
pollution
 than flights because there are too many of them on the road. What’s more, restricting
air
travel
 can have disastrous consequences for the economy. The tourism industry will be the worst hit because
limited availability
Suggestion
the limited availability
 of flights will discourage tourists from visiting foreign countries. Import and export of goods will
also
 be affected. Since both of these factors will affect the financial growth of the country, I do not believe that governments will want to limit
air
travel
. To conclude, restricting
air
travel
 is unlikely to improve
air
 quality much because aeroplanes are not the biggest polluters on the planet. What’s more, any
such
 move will have serious economic consequences.
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