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The development o f tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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The growth of the travel industry resulted in English becoming the most popular
language
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 in the world.
This
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 phenomenon has caused a concern that English may become the sole
language
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 spoken internationally. There are various pros and cons associated with using a single
language
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 globally. On the one hand, there are certain drawbacks of using the same
language
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.
Firstly
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, one problem with using a single
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 worldwide is the erosion of other languages and their associated cultures.
Language
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 and
culture
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 are inextricably linked, with unique words in every
language
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 to identify cultural artefacts and ideas of a
culture
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. When one
language
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 dominates the world, it means that the
culture
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 associated with that
language
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 prevails at the expense of other cultures.
For instance
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, the Wutuha
language
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 of Taiwan’s indigenous people contains clues about their ancient ways of life but little is known about it today due to the colonisation of their
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 and
culture
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 by Japanese and Chinese settlers.
On the other hand
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, there are certain benefits of using the same
language
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 across the world.
First
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 off, using a single
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worldwide promotes
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worldwide, promotes
 understanding and economic cooperation amongst nations. Sharing the same
language
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 facilitates communication of ideas, values and beliefs
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,
 which results in less misunderstandings and allows countries to see eye to eye on most of the issues. At the same time, it becomes easier to discuss terms of
trade
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 and
trade
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 negotiations when a single
language
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 is used worldwide
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 as there is no need for translators to become the middlemen between countries.
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, using a global
language
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 improves communication and results in smoother
trade
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 discussions and increases mutual understanding. Clearly, there are benefits and issues arising from using a global
language
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.
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, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh advantages simply because the threat of losing unique languages and their associated
culture
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 is greater than the benefits of having smoother communication and
trade
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 between nations.
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