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Every year large numbers of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of migration for the individual and for society as a whole.

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In recent years, People migrating to other countries for various reasons like higher studies and work have become popular. In
this
 essay I will discuss about the
advatages
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
 and
disadvanatges
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
disadvantage
 of relocation of people. Travelling to a new
country
 may provide
series
Suggestion
a series
 of benefits to people. It may provide an opportunity to learn about the culture and
language
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the language
 of the visiting
country
.
This
 will reduce the gap between different cultures.
Economy
Suggestion
The economy
 of the
country
 may get a boost by taking
higher number
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the higher number
a higher number
 of international students.
For example
, Students travelling to other countries
has
Suggestion
have
 to pay a huge amount to universities. Tourism is another prime reason for people to visit different nations which can
also
 contribute to the economy of
country
Suggestion
the country
a country
. Migration is a serious threat to most of the developed countries.
one
Suggestion
One
 common problem is the lack of jobs to the native people. Students after completing their higher studies starts to work in the same
country
 which
creates
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Creates
 a problem for the people who lives there for
long time
Suggestion
a long time
.
For example
, currently the USA faces the same situation where people protest
againt
in contact with
against
 their jobs being occupied by other nationals. Prevention of spreading diseases from immigrants is an
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 issue. Sometimes, immigrants are capable of spreading new bacteria or virus to the visiting nation which will make their own people vulnerable to disease.
In addition
 to that, theft is an another issue among tourists. Money or things of high value are being robbed by local people. In summary, migration is definitely an important aspect in the growth of nations where it has some disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Migrate
  • Immigrant
  • Emigrant
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Expatriate
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Naturalization
  • Work permit
  • Visa
  • Residence
  • Citizenship
  • Deportation
  • Brain drain
  • Demographic
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural shock
  • Social network
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