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Nowadays as a part of the education process students are working for a company for a short period of time without pay. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In current decades, many students
work
 at companies as an intern during their higher degrees. In my opinion, the advantage of
this
 trend outweighs its drawbacks.
To begin
 with, I believe that the benefits of working as a part-time outweigh the disadvantages. One of these is students will get an idea about their field of study as well as they would get an experience for the job which will ~definitely~ consider *during* their campus placement.
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~* they are not getting any salary for their
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* ~at the same time~ they learn how to behave with their clients, colleagues and *boss*
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For example
, *a* magazine named as employment news published ~a~ data which clearly states that students who worked as a part-time in a different organisation during their
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% of students have
more bright
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brighter
brightest
 future in the fields because they have prior knowledge about the job. Admittedly, one
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 Which can arise due to long working hours. Because there
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are
 no any terms and conditions specified for working as a part-time
Thus
, Students are forced to
work
 for long hours which have a direct adverse effect on their studies. Even, sometimes due to challenging
work
 environment and pressure of studies
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most of the students feel devastated and
demotivated
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or
introduces an alternative
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A survey in companies reveals that 78% of intern think that during their internship training in companies they have very less time for their studies as well as for extracurricular activities. To conclude, even *~
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~* there are many disadvantages to working part-time. I believe that students get more practical knowledge and idea on how to
work
 in an organisation and stay motivated during some critical situations.
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