Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that
most essential thing
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the most essential thing
about being rich is it provides a person the chance to aid other people.
However
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, I
am agree
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agree
have agreed
with
this
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notion due to some reasons below. On the one hand, rich people
helps
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help
local public in many ways.
Firstly
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, they pay huge amounts of tax, which provides money to the government to build great infrastructure, excellent
helth
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
services and education systems, and
that is
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all become easy for the government because of the rich people.
Secondly
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, because the rich people of
nation
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the nation
a nation
have enough money to spend, they provide lots of job placements for qualified employees by
build
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building
up new organizations.
For example
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, Mukesh
Ambani one
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Ambani, one
of India's richest man recently launched a big company called GEO, it is a telecom company, which gives jobs to many people in India.
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, richest people
also
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become ideal for many people. Because nobody
become
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becomes
wealthier over a night.
Their
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There
was
struggle
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a struggle
behind
everyone
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everyone's
life. So in that way they become motivation for struggling people and inspired them
,
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,
which helps the people to succeed in their lives and in their fields. It is
also
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beneficial for
nation
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the nation
, because
more successful
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most successful
people build the most powerful nation
.
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.
In conclusion, no doubt that rich people are very advantageous
for
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in
public and
country
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the country
too.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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