Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at schools while others think it is a waste of time. Disscuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It's argued that
Art
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should be
mandadory
required by rule
mandatory
for children at educational institutes. Against
this
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ideia
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
idea
, There are some who claim that it would be
waste
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a waste
of time.
This
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essays
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essay
is going to
disscuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
both
ideias
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
ideas
ideals
idea
and choose which one is more
resonable
showing reason or sound judgment
reasonable
.
Art
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is
a
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an
extremaly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
difficult field to thrive in. The job
oportunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
are scarce and the wages are lower. For
this
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reason many people think that investing in
art
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as a
suject
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subject
at
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in
schools is a waste of time for children who are learning to be able to work and support themselves in the future.
For instance
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, a famous actress in my country said in an interview that she had to study acting without her parents knowing
this
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. They were against her choosing
this
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career because she could not make a living from it. Children are significantly more creative than adults. Studies point that when we were born, our right brain
side
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, which
comands
an authoritative direction or instruction to do something
commands
commends
artistic and creative skills, is more developed than the left
side
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. Children start to lose their creative strengths as soon as they start to learn
exact subject
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an exact subject, such
an exact subject such
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as Mathematics and
Quemistry
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Chemistry
, which are
procesed
subjected to a special process or treatment
processed
pressed
by the left brain
side
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. If they stop using their right brain
side
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at that early stage,
this
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can lead to a poor innovative thinking in the future.
For example
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, in a recent survey at
Melboune
the capital of Victoria state and 2nd largest Australian city; a financial and commercial center
Melbourne
university 95% of the IT students,
acostumed
(often followed by 'to') in the habit of or adapted to
accustomed
to deal most of the time with numbers, declared that they are not creative at all. Analysing both sides, it is clear that
art
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is not the easiest filed to have professional success.
However
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,
this
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essay agrees with the view that children should not be deprived of learning
art
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at school because it would help them to keep their creative skills.
Eventhough
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Even though
they do not work with
art
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in the future, Creativity is an asset for thinking outside of the box and having
flexiblity
the property of being flexible; easily bent or shaped
flexibility
to either deal with the diverse types of obstacles in their
ellected
chosen in preference to another
selected
elected
profession or to innovate.
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