An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantage and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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In
modern technology world everything
Suggestion
the modern technology world, everything
the modern technology world everything
can buy from home without going outside of home
as a result
Linking Words
the number of people buying from online was
increase
Suggestion
increased
in order to get necessary things.
Pushasing
Suggestion
Purchasing
from online
has saving
Suggestion
is saving
has been saving
has saved
time and easy to
shop but
Accept comma addition
shop, but
there
also
Linking Words
some drawbacks for both individuals and companies
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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