Some people think that human history has been a journey from ignorance to knowledge. Others argue that this underestimates the achievements of ancient cultures, and overvalues our achievements. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is irrefutable that the mankind has evolved over a period of time from the

perspecitves

a way of regarding situations or topics etc.

perspectives

perspective

of not only technological but

also

social advancements and innovations.

However

, many

vateran

a serviceman who has seen considerable active service

veteran

veterans

historians and

archiologists

an anthropologist who studies prehistoric people and their culture

archaeologists

are of the view that our ancient civilizations were not far behind in terms of knowledge. If we compare the technological capabilities of

current era

Suggestion

the current era

against the previous century, there is no doubt that we are much more

sophesticated

having or appealing to those having worldly knowledge and refinement and savoir-faire

sophisticated

today. Over the

last

hundred years, we have jumped leaps and bounds when we think about the innovation in the communication and transportation technologies.

For example

; the internet, the satellite televisions and the radios would have been considered as things of fiction if someone would have talked about them two hundred years ago.

Similarly

; cars, helicopters or planes

are invented

Suggestion

were invented

just over hundred years ago. The industrial revolution and

healthcare

Suggestion

health care

innovations in the

last

two centuries have completely transformed the way we live our day to day life today.

However

, as we might not be aware about the

techlogies

the practical application of science to commerce or industry

technologies

of the past, we cannot claim that they did not exist. Many

archiologists

an anthropologist who studies prehistoric people and their culture

archaeologists

ecologists

from around the world have found the hidden

evidences

Suggestion

evidence

of advancements of ancient civilizations.

For example

, during the

archiological

related to or dealing with or devoted to archaeology

archaeological

ecological

surveys in Harappa and Lothal in India, the researchers have found the evidences of well paved roads, drainage lines and active ports which might have been developed about five thousand years ago.

Additionally

, the pyramids in Egypt have proven that even before five thousand years, highly advanced civil as well as biological knowledge prevailed

Suggestion

this

planet. Preservation of pyramid's structure and the dead bodies (

also

called mummies) till date

can not

cannot

be considered as a small feat by any measures! In my opinion, I somewhat agree with the view that in the

last

two centuries, the human race has seen the knowledge transformation like never before.

However

, it would be

injustice

Suggestion

an injustice

to our ancient culture if we would consider it as backward when would compare it to today's era without any concrete proofs.

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Prediction or recommendation

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In a nutshell
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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