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Government should spend money on railway rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is argued that funds should be spent by the authority on
rail
 track rather than on roads. In my own opinion, I totally agree with
this
 point of view because of the present focus on
rail
 transportation as well as the cost implication for the users.
First
 and foremost, recently, the most important reason why the
rail
 track should be considered for more allocations by the government is that there has been a recent increase in the number of people who use the
rail
 mode of passage.
For instance
, recently, most trains leaving the station now carry passengers to their fullest capacity, something which was not so in the past decades.
Thus
 making the railway a present focus of travel for most citizens.
Therefore
, any amount spent on it would not be considered a waste.
Secondly
, another reason why more funds should be budgeted for
rail
 track construction other than roads is that it is cheaper to journey within and outside the metropolis with trains. To illustrate, in Nigeria, the cost of travelling from Lagos to Osogbo by road is almost thrice the price of conveyance to the same destination by train.
This
 by implication makes people spend less to move from one place to the other every day.
Thus
 making train transportation the best choice for commuters.
As a result
, allocating more funds for building
this
 means is very essential. In conclusion, it is agreed that the budget made by the authority should be channeled towards building rails as opposed to disbursing it to road construction given the recent increase in the population that plies the
rail
 as opposed to that of the road and the less expensive outlay of train transportation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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