High job demands, stress and sense of commitment are among the main reasons people go to work when they are ill. This way they accomplish important tasks, but may infect others or get some serious health problems themselves. In your opinion should people go to work if they are sick? Support your point of view with relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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We live in a fast paced society  and people don’t
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 when they are sick not caring about their health or that of others around them. I believe
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act is wrong and employees should not be allowed to come to
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when they are sick as
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sickness
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can be highly contagious and the employee won’t
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come to
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because their
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might be highly contagious.
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that has flu comes to the office, he/she can infect someone else as
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is highly contagious. It is advisable for a sick
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to stay at home, use his drugs and get better so as not to infect others with his diseases.
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comes to the office, his condition might worsen and in the quest of accomplishing his task he will create more harm to himself than
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as his brain will be disturbed.
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, sick people shouldn’t come to
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as the
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might stay longer.[r] Most times, people fall ill due to stress and lack of rest. So
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if a sick
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who should be resting comes to
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, he might worsen his situation and his
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might stay longer. It is advisable that a sick
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should be well rested so he can recover quickly and once he is back on his feet, he will be able to function perfectly, all tasks will be accomplished and deadlines met. Some people might say that the sick
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ought to come to
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in order to perform all the
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person
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 won’t function effectively as he isn’t in his right frame of mind and his brain is muddled.
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that he would ordinarily finish in 30 mins will take him maybe 1 hour to complete.
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work but
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work, but
at a slow pace thereby making him inefficient. In conclusion, people shouldn’t go to
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when they are sick and alternatives can help perform the required task. Companies should have sick leave as part of their benefits so staff can  take leave when they are indispensable. Companies should ensure that staff that
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the office
when they are sick due to their sense of commitment should be asked to go back home as “Health is Wealth”.
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