Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the media

plays

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play

are playing

an important role in almost,

everycelebrity

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every celebrity

life.

Its

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It's

not only making them popular, but

also

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other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

way. Let's discuss the other side of the coin, as below.

Important point

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The important point

An important point

to be discussed, on the negative side, is privacy. Almost, all the popular personals, privacy was lost because of these people. In order to increase their

viewes

a way of regarding situations or topics etc.

views

, they tend to make the personal life of well known public. Because of

this

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situation, most of the people, lost their

space

a person's partner in marriage

spouse

and family.

For example

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, if they are going to telecast, a relation of

couple

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the couple

couples

, who are friends,

then

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their family may mistake as other relation, which may lead to

embrassing situation

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an embarrassing situation

embarrassing situation

for them.

Intially

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Initially

, TV channel, make the person

famous but

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famous, but

projecting their

caliber

a degree or grade of excellence or worth

calibre

, but later

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then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

tend

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tending

to peek in to their private matter's. So that they can increase the followers. Not only

them but

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them, but

some of us, willingly, cooperate with them in order to be a talk of

town

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the town

For example

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, to make publicity for

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movie,

casting team

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the casting team

create

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creates

controvercy

a contentious speech act; a dispute where there is strong disagreement

controversy

controversies

on their actors.

This

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cheap trick

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a cheap trick

, but most of the public, will get attracted to it. In conclusion, in my opinion, everyone wants and should have their personal life. Neither the media nor the other can step into it, unless

untill

up to, before the time

until

it was accepted by the owner.

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