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Some parent buy their children large number of toys. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this practice

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Toys always make a
child
 happy, and a parent wants to live that experience repeatedly.
As a result
 of that, many children end up with a large number of toys. In
this
 essay, I will
potray
portray in words
portray
 the role
such
 collection of toys can have on a
child
's development while
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 their impact on social interaction. On the one hand, an
almirah
a large wardrobe or cabinet; originally used for storing weapons
armoire
 full of toys gives a
child
 numerous choices in developing his skills.
This
 is because most toys are designed to challenge and enhance a kid's mental as well as physical abilities.
For example
, Yo-Yo is a popular toy, and its popularity can be associated with the unique movement that amuses a
child
,
in addition
 to sharpening his focus.
Therefore
, a youngster with a room full of toys can play with a focus enhancing toy in the morning and physically demanding one in the afternoon.
This
 usually results in better growth of children. The goodness of having a large number of toys is often undermined by the limitations they impose on young ones. As most of the toys are meant to be played alone
by
Suggestion
with
 a
child
, they result in minimization of social interactions in a youngster's life. To illustrate, a study undertaken by one of the biggest daycare centres reveals that around 70% of the children living in modern Indian cities interact for less than 7 hours a week with their peers. Alternatively, if
such
 children do not get plenty of toys to play with, many of them would socialize more, thereby increasing their probability of future success. To conclude, having a significant number of toys can be beneficial for a
child
's development, but it may come at the expense of peer bonding.
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