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Some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them.Other people say believe its good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss boths views and give your own opinion please!

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In living, it is normal that
people
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 always have
thoughts
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 on something. In fact,
others
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'
opinions
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 are able to build our life up in any aspect,
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, suggestions or advice given by our
friends
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.
However
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, some
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 argue that it is better to have
friends
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 who have the same personal
thoughts
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 as we do, and some of them argue that it is crucial to make
friends
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 with
people
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 who would always agree with our
opinions
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. In
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 essay, I would like to elaborate on some advantages and disadvantages of both sides.
To begin
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 with, I suppose some groups prefer to make
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 with
people
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 who always deliver the same
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 is because to avoid some arguments
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 of opinion differences.
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 who care about their living as a social being
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 other societies. I am sure that they tend to be more careful about what they speak in order to keep their relationship.
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, they try to avoid differences in their
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.
On the other hand
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, having
friends
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 who always agree with what you say leads you to lack resources, especially to do good decision-making and perform critical thinking. Both decision-making and critical thinking can be formed by taking our personal opinion or receiving
others
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'
opinions
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, and
also
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 using our and other's
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.
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, researchers prefer to listen to other statements, and even
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 to conduct more valid research.
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, I believe that some societies would rather have
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 who sometimes disagree with their
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 to enrich their
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,
as well as
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 critical thinking. I strongly agree that listening to
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'
ideas
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 could bring some variety to the way we think and see. Other than that,
others
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'
opinions
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 can be helpful in improving our
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 and making decisions.
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,
in contrast
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, there could be some arguments and issues which are caused by those differences. Sometimes,
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 can be hard-headed about their
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, even though those
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 can be mistaken.
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, if we prefer to make
friends
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 who have different
thoughts
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, we
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 need patience to deal with them. In conclusion,
people
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 can have their preferences to make
friends
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 with. Either making
friends
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 with
people
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 who always agree with us, or
friends
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 who sometimes disagree with us has its own advantages and disadvantages.

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task response
To strengthen the task response, try to provide more specific examples that support your main points. For instance, you could mention real-life scenarios or studies that illustrate how differing opinions have benefitted or hindered relationships.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports and elaborates on a single point. This will help maintain a logical structure throughout your essay.
task response
Your essay provides a well-rounded discussion of both views, addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of each.
coherence cohesion
You have an effective introduction and conclusion that help frame your argument well.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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