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stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. what do you think are the causes of this? what solutions can you suggest?

#illnesses
Now a
days
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day
, stress is one of the major issues that are facing by the people.
This
has
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Has
 become increasingly common.
This
essay
 will discuss the main causes of
stress
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Stress
-related
issues including
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issues, including
 longer working hours and increased job pressure.
This
essay
 will
also
 suggest solutions to these
problems including
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problems, including
 improving one's
work
-life balance and healthy diet. There are many causes
to
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of
this
 issue
:
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:
 One of the main reason is that longer working hours and the others include
increase
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an increase
 in job pressure. People
often wants
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often want
 to climb high and wants to achieve more at
an
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a
 young age.
As a result
, they are working more hours than usual which is not the right thing to do. Another reason is that the kind of
work
 pressure is high among
employees especially
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employees, especially
 at Information and technology industry.
For instance
, a job holder at a major
company firm
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company, firm
 at Chennai is required to
work
 more than 10 hours which
is leading
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are leading
 to
deplition
the act of decreasing something markedly
depletion
 of employee health.
This
 often results in mental and physical disorders. Maintaining the
work
-life balance and including healthy meals in their diet are the possible solution to the problem to
over come
win a victory over
overcome
 stress-related illnesses. People who
work
 for
longer
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long
 hours may suffer
physical
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physically
,
pshychologically
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
 illness and food habits are
also
 contributing to
this
 problem.
For example
, many people
involve
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are involved
 in
work neglecting
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work, neglecting
 about family, food,
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
this
 resulting negative
impacts
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impact
 on our body.
Therfore
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Therefore
, in order to reduce stress one must include healthy diets, working out for an hour in their daily life. Stress related issues
has become
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have become
more increasingly common
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increasingly more common
 over the years.
This
essay
 discussed the causes of stress-related illnesses.
This
essay
 suggested the possible solutions to lead a healthier and balanced life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • hypertension
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • modern lifestyle
  • work pressure
  • technological advancements
  • social pressures
  • material wealth
  • work-life balance
  • mindfulness
  • meditation
  • stress management
  • flexible working hours
  • telecommuting
  • mandatory vacation
  • educational programs
  • mental health
  • supportive work environment
  • counseling services
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