The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some individuals are of the opinion that the recent practice of youngsters spending more time in shopping malls, will influence them and their environment negatively. I consider that, visiting the store at will by teenagers
create
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creates
a desperation in their minds and
this
is bad for the
society
as a whole.
Firstly
, spending leisure hours in the mall is not in itself a bad idea for people.
However
, for teenagers, it is not advisable because when they see desirable items,
temptation
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the temptation
arises within them and they are under pressure to go the extra mile, doing everything possible to purchase the product if their parents
can not
can not
cannot
afford it. Evidently,
this
is not a good influence on the child.
Therefore
,
such
aimless visits to the malls ought to be prevented by parents.
For instance
, I have had to constantly
reitrate
pull back or move away or backward
retreat
reiterate
retreated
to my 15 year old cousin to be contented with whatever her parents give her due to the fact that her frequent trips with her friends after school hours to the store has developed in her a craving for extravagant things.
Thus
, prompting her to steal her mother's money.
Hence
, guardians should try and engage their
youths
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youth
at leisure periods.
Secondly
, allowing youngsters to leisurely go to shopping centres not only affect the individual negatively, it
also
has
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
adverse effects
on the
society
.
This
is because the desperation created in the minds of these children is a seed which will germinate into theft.
In addition
, many of the armed robbers out there today started from just being
coveteous
showing extreme cupidity; painfully desirous of another's advantages
covetous
. An example is that of a renowned hired
assasin
a murderer (especially one who kills a prominent political figure) who kills by a surprise attack and often is hired to do the deed
assassin
who is presently on death row. He blamed his father for indulging him too much when he was young. He arrived home whenever he pleases and nothing his parents gave him was ever enough.
Lastly
, parents should train their children to be good citizens and not breed rogues for the
society
. In conclusion, while spending free time to shop is not bad, I think parents should frow
n
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on
at it because it creates desperation in young minds and the
society
will be at the receiving en
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after all
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