Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Wealthier nations often offer financial
support
to undeveloped countries,
however
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however, this
this
does nothing to help solving
poverty
.
That is
why it is argued that richer countries should provide other kind of
support
to poorer countries.
This
essay agrees with
this
statement because in most of developing countries government are corrupted so the
money
is not invested and
also
because
money
is not useful if richer countries exploited
natural resources
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the natural resources
of developing countries.
Although
richer countries have more
money
than poorer ones, giving financial
support
have been proved not been efficient as a way of helping solve
poverty
. The main reason for
this
is that in the majority of developing
countries
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country's
countries'
government are corrupted. So, any
money
that developed countries invest in undeveloped ones, ends up in a black hole.
For example
, according to a study carried by the United Nations Development Program (UNDP) on 30 developing countries from Asia, Latin America and Africa, half of
this
nations
have had corrupted
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corrupt
governments over the
last
20 years.
On the other hand
, most richer and industrialized countries that usually donate
money
to poor ones, are the same that devastate their natural resources.
This
is the motive why the
money
that richer countries donate is done as a manner of compensation for the natural destruction of the ecosystems in undeveloped countries. The destruction of
this
ecosystems
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ecosystem
causes more
poverty
,
thus
not helping in solving
this
issue; and
money
can do little to help once the ecosystem has been destroyed,
in addition
to the fact that
most
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more money
money
is not invested in the country.
For instance
, a recent study
of
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by
the Harvard University has found that 30% of the Amazonia Forest has been cut-down, over the
last
50 years and mostly by foreigner companies, and that
this
has caused at least 50,000 of poor people in Brazil. In conclusion,
this
essay agrees with the statement that richer countries should provide
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
type of
support
to developing nations rather than
money
because
money
has been proved not to be invested in the development of people in those countries and because other kinds of help
such
as
commitment
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a commitment
to not destroy the natural resources of developing countries could result of a better path towards reducing
poverty
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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