Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Wealthier nations often offer financial
support
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to undeveloped countries,
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however
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however, this
this
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does nothing to help solving
poverty
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.
That is
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why it is argued that richer countries should provide other kind of
support
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to poorer countries.
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essay agrees with
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statement because in most of developing countries government are corrupted so the
money
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is not invested and
also
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because
money
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is not useful if richer countries exploited
natural resources
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the natural resources
of developing countries.
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richer countries have more
money
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than poorer ones, giving financial
support
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have been proved not been efficient as a way of helping solve
poverty
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. The main reason for
this
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is that in the majority of developing
countries
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country's
countries'
government are corrupted. So, any
money
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that developed countries invest in undeveloped ones, ends up in a black hole.
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, according to a study carried by the United Nations Development Program (UNDP) on 30 developing countries from Asia, Latin America and Africa, half of
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nations
have had corrupted
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corrupt
governments over the
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20 years.
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, most richer and industrialized countries that usually donate
money
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to poor ones, are the same that devastate their natural resources.
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is the motive why the
money
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that richer countries donate is done as a manner of compensation for the natural destruction of the ecosystems in undeveloped countries. The destruction of
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ecosystems
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ecosystem
causes more
poverty
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,
thus
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not helping in solving
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issue; and
money
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can do little to help once the ecosystem has been destroyed,
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to the fact that
most
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more money
money
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is not invested in the country.
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, a recent study
of
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by
the Harvard University has found that 30% of the Amazonia Forest has been cut-down, over the
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50 years and mostly by foreigner companies, and that
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has caused at least 50,000 of poor people in Brazil. In conclusion,
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essay agrees with the statement that richer countries should provide
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
type of
support
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to developing nations rather than
money
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because
money
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has been proved not to be invested in the development of people in those countries and because other kinds of help
such
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as
commitment
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a commitment
to not destroy the natural resources of developing countries could result of a better path towards reducing
poverty
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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