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Television has dominated the free time of people. It can make people lazy and not socialize with others. Do you agree or disagree

#television #time #people
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It is irrefutable that technology has helped us in many
ways but
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ways, but
 as its said what ever has an advantage equally has a disadvantage.
Television
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 serves as a medium of entertainment and source of news to people,
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 some people say that watching
television
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 makes people lazy and social
misfit but
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misfit, but
 in contrary I believe that there should moderation in the use of these technologies
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 as
television
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, mobile phones, internet and so on. Programs viewed
in
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on
 the
television
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 has reached a mammoth dimension due to the invention of cable networks that have hundreds of channels that keep people engaged
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 reducing interaction with other people.
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, Dstv offers a variety of channels that keeps the viewer entertained all day and all night.
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Netflix which
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Netflix, which
 shows different movies and can keep one at a place for hours while watching these movies. These inventions linked to
television
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 has made most people imbalance socially and lazy. They spend most of their time glued to the
television
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 rather than having a healthy conversation with other people. And they
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 tend to achieve little or nothing daily due to the fact that they spend more hours on
television
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 screens.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore, television
television
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 has been one of the most common means of conveying news to
people but
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people, but
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, I agree that times spent watching the tv should be moderated so as to give other necessary
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activity
 time too.
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,
television
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 should be used for relaxation and leisure and not to interfere with work especially and communication with other people. In conclusion people should inculcate the habit of watching
television
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 during relaxation as too much of everything they say is bad.
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