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The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solution can you suggest?

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The discrepancy is incrementing between the wealthy and the impoverished people. Due to
this
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, economic prosperity is hampered and education is not conferred to all. To rectify the entire scenario, it is imperative to impart free education and open myriad job avenues. To embark on, financial progress is halted. As one section of the society earns enormous revenue and pays back to the nation in the form of income tax, the other part of the community hardly generates any income to survive.
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, contributing none to the national development. To exemplify, as per the World Prosperity Report, the highest deviation between the upper and the lower section of the society has been witnessed in Pakistan, and the nation stands in the
first
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 100 countries to have a poor financial status. To combat the difference,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should edify the
destitude
poor enough to need help from others
destitute
 children free of cost. By initiating
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 a campaign, poverty-stricken children would make the most of it.
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, education will entitle the populace to grab distinct lucrative opportunities to feed the family;
consequently
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, the entire state would be financially autonomous. Another fruitful way is to start creating more employment options so that none is unemployed, and masses could be a substantial part of national growth.
For example
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, the United Kingdom takes the responsibility to educate each and every child and tops the list of wealthy kingdoms. To encapsulate, to mitigate the gigantic issue of divergence in the monetary position of
the high
Suggestion
the highest
 class and the low class, the administration should take up the onus to bestow every citizen with the fundamental right of knowledge and start up projects to give jobs to the natives;
otherwise
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 the repercussion of the disparity, national development, would take a toll.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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