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People's health will be lower in future then now. To what extend you agree or disagree with this, Give examples from your own knowledge.

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It is certain that there will be a lot of differences in the lifestyles of the people in the coming time. To be specific, wellness will deteriorate as time passes ahead. As I strongly agree with
this
 statement,
this
 essay will discuss the possible causes
such
 as
food
 habits and
pollution
.
To begin
 with, the main source of well being of an individual is the
food
 that he eats. Earlier many families used to prefer homemade meals, which are in turn good for
health
, compared to fast
food
 or ready to cook varieties, high in unsaturated fats and preservatives that make a person obese. But
this
 trend seems to be changing as both parents are working in most families and all members rely on outside sources for eating.
This
 can be exemplified with school children eating unhealthy junk
food
 have higher chances of faltered
health
 in
future
. I feel
this
, in turn, shows how bad
food
 habits will cause weak
health
 in the coming era. Another significant factor
for
Suggestion
in
 the high
health
 risks in
future
Suggestion
the future
 is the environment that surrounds us. People from the old generations used to live longer than today’s population because the environment was free from
pollution
. But now,
however
, research suggests that the air and water
pollution
 will reach its peak in the
future
 and it is capable of making humans very sick. To describe, people living in Delhi, a city with the highest air
pollution
, are prone to Lung cancer and breathing problems. If
pollution
 issues are resolved, I must say people from the
future
 will show high vulnerability to diseases. In conclusion, I completely agree with the fact that people from the
future
 will lack good
health
as a result
 of bad
food
 habits and the polluted environment.
Submitted by Prathamesh on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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