it is generally accepted that exercise is good for children and teenagers. Therefore , physical education and sport should be compulsory for all students in all schools . what do you think?

since
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Since
the ancient times, people have been entertaining themselves through sports and physical education in order to maintain a good healthy habit
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It is true to say that
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,
exercise
is essential for every one's life. In my opinion
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,
exercise
is vital for children and teenagers. In the past, most of the schools provide special consideration for doing
exercise
in the morning and they
also
included an hour for doing sports activities.
As a result
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,
those children who do morning routine
exercise
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feel more relaxed and refreshed
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.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
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doing sports activity may improve the health condition of a student and
also
it may improve the quality of study due to mental and physical relaxation. In foreign countries
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school authorities and parents encourage their children to interact in different activities because the aim to improve the quality of team spirit which may helpful for their future.
those
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the
other hand
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some of the parents who have no correct knowledge about the sports activities may not encourage or entertain their children to do those activities
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.
So
thay
people in general
they
that
this
will
diversily
in an adverse manner
adversely
affect to
thier
of them or themselves
their
tire
life
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that
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That
is because
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students who
consendrate
make denser, stronger, or purer
concentrate
only in studies may suffer
siviour
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
mental problems like depression.
tht
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That
Tht
is why some
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
seems
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seem
to be
desprate
arising from or marked by despair or loss of hope
desperate
disparate
and low energetic. Agglomerating all the points elaborated
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above, it
can be concluded that by implementing sports and physical education may create a fruitful
carrer
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carer
carers
care
career
of children and adult. The fact in the case point is that,
exercise
is
essential element
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an essential element
for one's
helathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
future.
Therfore
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Therefore
, in my
opinon
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
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,
sports education is compulsory and which may improve our
fittness
the quality of being suitable
fitness
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,
skills, brain development and
also
through
this
we can reduce stress and
starin
to exert much effort or energy
strain
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical health
  • mental health
  • compulsory
  • instill
  • regular exercise
  • participation
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • resilience
  • academic studies
  • concentration
  • focus
  • childhood obesity
  • motor skills
  • coordination
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