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• Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. • Why is this? • What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?

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Our grandparents used to get
energy
 for many uses by burning fuels. But with the development and
technology scientists
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technology, scientists
 found more developed ways to get
energy
. Some of these ways is using the
energy
 of blowing winds or even ocean waves, but the most common type of
energy
 is solar
energy
. As we know everything has advantages and disadvantages. In
this
 essay I will mention the positives and negatives of solar
energy
. Starting with the good side of solar
energy
. Getting
energy
 to warm our homes from the sunlight is a way to improve and take care of our
environment
. When we use fuel to heat our homes or even for households we are destroying the
environment
 by increasing air pollution and even using resources that
can not
can not
cannot
 be recycled, as well as, killing animals to build industries for burning fuels and ending up with the distortion of oceans and seas which is the home for
fishes
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the fishes
 and sea animals. Even though heating our places with solar
energy
 is useful for our
environment
, but it is not good on the other side. Some countries have more night hours than day hours in which they do not get enough time to warm their homes using solar
energy
. As well as, using solar
energy
 is not
cheap it
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cheap, it
 needs equipments and solar systems which cost a leg and an arm
,
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,
 not anyone can afford the prices especially that life expenses are increasing and getting
more higher
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higher
 than
anytime
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any time
 before.
Lastly
, solar
energy
 is a great invention to get heat from the
environment
 without destroying the world. For sure in the future there will be more and more developed ways to get the
energy
 we need for households, but for now solar
energy
 is the best way
beside
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besides
 getting it from
winds
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the winds
 and waves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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