It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is a difference between inherent talents in various

level

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such

as sports or music and trained

talent

to make them perfect in that sector.

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it is believed that

students

can be taught

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equal training in every sector. I

also

experienced

this

example from our own school, where the

students

were taught to be

musician

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or sports

person

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. But in

these

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away

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they only can learn things physically not by heart. Most of the time it becomes only

leisure

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activity, not their passion.

On the other hand

, some

peoples

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have intrinsic

talent

, got

this

through genetic legacy and that quality creates a humongous difference from others. Innate

talent

is one’s own gift. The skill that

students

have been learning for many years emits automatically from those who are naturally talented.

However

, I personally think that

although

teachers provide the same class, method and education for all

students

but

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when it comes

between

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nature and nurture,

then

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they are conducive to each other. In spite of having natural ability, people

needs

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training to become perfect.

Actually

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natural ability is a diamond but training is required to polish it to make sparkle.

On the other hand

, training is useless for the empty vessel. If a person does not have a minute amount of quality,

then

training

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futile for him. So in my opinion, inherent

talent

is better than trained

skilled

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Because people

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can make themselves good or sometimes better in some

activity

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but it needs some natural

talent

to be excellent.

Moreover

, natural ability

also

need

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to be polished to exploit their luminosity. A person can be better by hard

working

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but they cannot meet the level as compared to innate

talent

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

283 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Innate talent
Nurture
Prodigy
Proficiency
Deliberate practice
Physiological factors
Grit
Perseverance
Cultural norms
Structured training
Physical predisposition
Natural aptitude
Dedicated training
Societal influence
Passion
Genetic endowment
Skill acquisition
Expertise
Extracurricular activities
Mastery
Cognitive abilities

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