Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The teacher

is a person who shape up the entire life of the

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through his or her knowledge and they are

influencer

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influencing

for students. It is true that

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teacher

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the teacher

have

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has

more impact on students than their parents. I totally agree with the statement that

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teacher

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the teacher

teachers

play

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plays

vital role in intellectual and social development. In

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discuss the both

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discuss both the

views and justify my view. To commence, children spend quality

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with

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teacher

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the teacher

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, they spend more

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with parents at home but

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is not as productive as the small amount of

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spent with the

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. We all know that parents are busy with their work most of the

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and even if children are around, they hardly pay attention to them.

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, all

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is either teaching or guiding them

in extracurricular activity

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in an extracurricular activity

. They keep focused on children's study and as a consequence of

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they have

more intellectual impact

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a more intellectual impact

on them.

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, teachers are role model

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for

students. They

are not only influence

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are not only influencing

do not only influence

are not only influenced

have not only influenced

their

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intellectually but socially too.

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student

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the student

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follows

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behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

. They observe how they

tackles

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tackle

difficult situations.

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, at home parents could influence

socially but

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socially, but

it is seen that in nuclear family parents hardly find

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for

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. Children learn social skills from TV or other activities they do at home.

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, teachers are more important than

parents for

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parents, for

social skills.

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, parents are important as same as

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teacher

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teachers

a teacher

because they are more aware of the world and they have better capability of guiding them.

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, they know very well to own child than

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so they can influence them in

proper way

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a proper way

. So, children

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also depend

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depending on parents. To conclude, it can be said that once

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school

starts,

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can be helped more to make

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intelligent and social person but parents

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do contribution in it. So, I agree with the statement that when children get admission in school,

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have more impact on

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Structured learning environment
Cognitive skills
Social interactions
Pedagogical techniques
Moral values
Emotional well-being
Complementary roles
Academic and social education
Individualized attention
Life skills training

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Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that children benefit from the TV and they should spend much time on it, but others support that children should not watch TV. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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