Many developing countries require aid from international organisations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that multinational companies should provide financial assistance to underdeveloped nations to help them thrive, other people argue that
consultation
Suggestion
the consultation
would be more beneficial to those countries. Personally, I strongly agree that assistance in the form of
advice
would outperform the monetary aid. Advocates of the financial side believe that large sums of
money
may help impoverished countries to address a number of social issues and help to build their countries.
First
,
this
money
will accommodate the basic needs of their citizens
such
as
money
, food, and water, addressing social problems
such
as poverty, hunger, and water shortage.
Second
, with a sustainable supply of
money
, ordinary people would have no reason to commit social crimes
such
as thief or robbing;
hence
, the quality of life is dramatically improved.
Lastly
, by spending the budget received from those companies on enhancing the infrastructure of roads and public facilities like
hospital
Suggestion
hospitals
or community
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
, the lives of their citizens will be more satisfactory.
On the other hand
, supporters of the
advice
would argue that consultation and practical
advice
are conducive to the long-term development of poverty-stricken nations. In fact, there are some countries which are disoriented in terms of their development plans.
Therefore
, it would help the governments of those countries to become clear about their plans, leading to proper execution. In my opinion, it is likely that financial assistance may fall into the hands of corrupt politicians who will use the
money
to serve their own purposes and interests, so giving suggestions is an optimal option.
For instance
, a notoriously infamous Vietnamese politician, Nguyen Van A, keeping millions of dollars received from Microsoft to support poor families in remote areas for his private use, got caught and sentenced to life imprisonment. In conclusion, while there are clear benefits of either financial aid or
advice
, I hold a view that the
advice
solution would have an even greater impact on needy countries in reality.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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