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Cities are now expanding; should the government make a better network for public transport or should they build more roads to facilitate car ownership? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of better job opportunities and lifestyle. The expansion of cities, unfortunately, causes many problems. Traffic congestion is one of them. Some people argue that building better
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 problem. Others insist that the government should build more roads to make
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 for the growing number of private vehicles. In my opinion, both measures are required to tackle the traffic problems plaguing large cities. Improving public
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 is unarguably the most effective
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 to make cities more livable. When buses and trains run on time and provide connectivity all over the city, few people will want to drive their own vehicles.
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 will automatically reduce the number of private vehicles on the
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. When there are fewer cars on the
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, there will be no traffic jams. Another advantage of having fewer vehicles on the
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 is that air quality will automatically improve. Respiratory problems caused by air pollution affect almost everyone living in the cities and a reliable public
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 system will help everyone breathe easily. Building more roads and improving existing infrastructure is
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 important. More roads enhance connectivity and in most
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 reduce the distance between two parts of the city and
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 reduce travelling time. Another advantage of building more roads is that it will reduce
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 mishaps and save many lives. In conclusion, improving the frequency and reliability of public
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 is definitely one
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 of resolving traffic issues affecting metropolises. Building more roads is another measure worth considering.
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