Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

Social networking sites are having
huge
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a huge impact
impact
on our community.
This
essay will discuss about how social media
is negatively impacting
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are negatively impacting
our society. Before social media came into people's life, everyone used to meet their family members,
friends in
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friends, in
-person and celebrated every occasion with them.
Nowadays with
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Nowadays, with
the invention of social media nobody wants to
socialize but
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socialize, but
wants to connect with community on social media.
For instance
, people prefer talking to others on chat or
facebook
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Facebook
instead
of phone calls. According to
recent survey
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a recent survey
recent surveys
its observed that people spending time on social media is rapidly increasing.
Although
main
moto
a favorite saying of a sect or political group
motto
of social media is to connect people virtually, overuse of it is isolating people physically. Social networking sites like twitter has given everyone right to share their opinions independently with people
anytime anywhere
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anytime, anywhere
but these opinions are causing lots of chaos since not everyone's opinion is creating positive vibe.
For
instance if
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instance, if
some politician is expressing something on twitter about some policy,
its
it is
it's
provoking lots of reactions from other countries and citizens sometimes resulting
into
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in
riots.
Miscommunication
or misuse of words by celebrity in their message on social media is giving
wrong impression
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the wrong impression
to
world
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the world
. Not only it is causing negative
impact but
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impact, but
also
producing health problems and other issues.
Total amount
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The total amount
of time person
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of time a person
spending on social media is increasing day by
day which
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day, which
is resulting in issues like insomnia, road accidents due to loss of attention, loss of concentration in young children, relations are getting destroyed. Looks like after some time we might need social media addiction reliving hospitals like drug addiction. To conclude, looks like social media is having
negative
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a negative impact
impact
than positive even though it was developed to help people. Overuse of anything is bad and
this
is applicable in case of social media use
also
. People should try to restrain them from social media as much as possible if they want to live happy and satisfying life. If
this
continues and people don't realize the
impact
of social
media overuse
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media, overuse
,
then
that future is not that far away when nobody in the world will have any real social life.
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