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In many countries, more and more women have full-time jobs as men. There is a logic that they should share the housework equally with men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, a commonly contemporary attention has been placed on the fact that the number of women who owns a full-time job has increased recently. People argue that they should
share
 the
housework
 equally with men. Personally, I agree with
this
 statement for several reasons. It can be said that men and women have the same equal rights in the society as well as in the marriage. When they
share
 the
housework
 with their partners, an awareness of responsibility is accelerated between the husbands and wives.
This
 guarantees that the household chores are completed faster and much
more effectively
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more effective
. It is obviously possible that the more equally men and women
share
 the
housework
, the more stable their relationship
becomes in a long
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becomes a long
 run. Another additional reason is that equal
householdchores
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household chores
 dividing between men and women
is
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are
 considerably one of the most efficient ways in
children parenting
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parenting children
. The equivalent time sharing of a couple which is balanced with domestics and educating children creates a great intimacy
amongs
in division, with shares to each
amongst
among
mambers
one of the persons who compose a social group (especially individuals who have joined and participate in a group organization)
members
member
 of the family,
thus
 has a positive effect on family’s happiness. A clear illustration of
this
 is that my parents always
share
 the similar amount of
housework
 and take care of me and my brother.
Therefore
, I feel duty bound to give a hand to help my parents. That
significantly make
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significantly makes
 my family bonding time more valuable. All things considered, one may conclude that sharing domestic chores between men and women is a pivotal key to any vibrant community and relationships.
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