Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts, and that this money can be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

In our
country
today, many people are of the opinion that too much money is being lavished on art works
instead
of more profitable ventures. I,
however
, completely disagree with
this
notion for a number of reasons. In the
first
place, investments made into artistic works have been known to greatly improve the
economy
of any
country
through tourism. It is no longer news that people from different regions of the world are drawn to places with outstanding art galleries. As they come, they contribute greatly to the nation's
economy
by creating more jobs for the local people.
For instance
, according to the Nigerian Tourists Regulation Agency, tourism accounted for over fifty percent of the total revenue generated by the
country
in 2018.
This
revenue has contributed immensely to the funding of capital projects which, in turn, has led to an impressive growth in the nation's
economy
.
In addition
, the government's so-called "extravagant" spendings on the arts has significantly improved the global image of the
country
. Right up to the 21st of July, 2018, the
country
has always been ranked below the twenty-fifth position in any International Recognition ranking.
However
, as soon as the government invested a huge sum into purchasing the famous
Monalisa
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Mona Lisa
Portrait from the British Museum; an event that was aired live by top global news agencies, our rankings soared above the tenth position.
This
implies that many people have developed
interest
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an interest
in our
country
which will soon see to more foreign investors trooping into the
country
. In conclusion, spending money on artistic works is by no means wasteful as it has greatly improved the global image of our
country
as well as its
economy
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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