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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resource while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that exploring
space
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 involves too much investment and time, while others think it is required for survival of human existence. In
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 requires huge amounts of
money which
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money, which
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 could be invested for the basic needs of the people. Food, clothing and shelter
form
a giver or sender
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 the primary needs of the mankind and these should take precedence before any other development.
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, in the USA, 50 percent of the government savings are spent on the NASA agency, a portion of which could have been used to help certain poor areas in the New York city.
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, it is important to satisfy the primitive needs before spending money on exploration of
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the universe
. Developed countries should help the poor countries to build these amenities
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 of spending on
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.
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, it
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 seems important to
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 the planets and the universe. If we had not done enough
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 on
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, we would not have found about the ozone depletion
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, and
annual rise
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annual rises
an annual rise
 in
earth’s temperature
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the earth’s temperature
. Because of
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 exploration, we had the opportunity to learn more about the planet we live in, and develop a plan to safeguard the Earth from unexpected disasters.
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,
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research
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 has helped us to understand the nature and the precautions we should take for natural calamities.
Space
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 would be very important for the future in order to look for a planet suitable for human existence to dwell, in case of Earth's destruction due to extreme
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undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
 and global warming. To conclude, even though
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 exploration provides significant knowledge about our planet and the universe, I think we should
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 spend on delivering basic needs of the people. Once adequate funds are allocated for
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, we can
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 look into
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 and explore more about the galaxies.
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