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Recently, many people know only a few of their neighbors. What is the cause of this problem? What can be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and any example from your own experience.

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Nowadays, many people are less interested in maintaining any friendly relation with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
. The face to face interaction and the sense of brotherhood have been diminishing since the emergence of the sophisticated life and hi-tech culture.
This
 essay will briefly look into some of its causes and suggest some solutions.
Firstly
, today’s young generations are well educated and they prefer to migrate to the metros for their livelihood because of
this
 their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 are strangers to them. The majority of people do not show the interest to build a sudden relationship with strangers. Apart from
this
, the cultural and language difference
are
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is
also
 a factor of concern when it comes to interaction among the
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
.
Moreover
, people are so busy with their work schedule; most of them leave home early in the morning and reach late
at
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in
 the night so they generally do not have enough time to interact with the
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
. Another reason is the addiction to electronic media. These days, many people spend much of their free time on social networking sites like Facebook and Instagram.
However
,
this
 is an unhealthy development and may lead to various social and psychological problems. In order to tackle
this
, everyone should understand that their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 would be more helpful than their closest relatives in case of an emergency situation at their homes. People must reduce the usage of social
media which
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media, which
 are full of virtual friends and should rather focus on building harmonious relation with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
. People residing in metros should form some clubs to integrate with other people coming from the same state/region as
them
people in general
they
. In my own experience I have witnessed that in a funeral service
at
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in
 an apartment in a metro city there were hardly ten to fifteen people. Most of the
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 in that housing colony were clueless about what happened in that home. To conclude, we should consider the fact that
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 can be more helpful to us than our nearest relatives in certain situations and we must build good relation with them.
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