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Writing Samples
Band 8

You are a teacher at a secondary school (high school). You have been asked to arrange a visit to a local museum or tourist attraction for some of your students. Write a letter to the manager of the museum or tourist attraction. In your letter you should: say who you are and which school you teach at say why the school would like the students to visit the museum/attraction ask about educational facilities or information that the museum/attraction can provide.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am the Head of
History
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 at Wigglesworth Secondary School and I have been asked to arrange a visit to your
museum
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 – The Midsomer County
Museum
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 of
History
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 – for a group of about 20 students, accompanied by two members of staff. We believe that viewing the exhibits at your
museum
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 would benefit the students immensely. The fact that your
museum
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 focuses on local
history
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 should help the students to realise that
history
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 is not an abstract subject about things that have no influence on their lives. If you could provide me with some more detailed information about the exhibits you currently have and intend to have in October
.
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 If you could let me know whether guided tours are available for school groups, I would be very grateful. We have not yet decided on an exact date, but we are looking
at the end
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 of October. I hope
this
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 is acceptable. Thank you in advance and I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Emily Smith

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task achievement
The letter provides a clear purpose for the visit and states the number of students and staff attending. This shows a complete response to the task.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is clear with an appropriate greeting and closing. Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, which aids understanding.
positive
The letter has a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for a formal request.
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