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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the
last
 few decades would had
face
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faced
 a big challenge by the terrific increasing of
population
 which it is making a high
influenc
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
influences
 on public services
.
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.
 Since the mid of
last century 80s we
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the last century 80s, we
the last century 80s we
 are facing a great problem due to illegal immigration and the moving from country sides to
city
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the city
a city
 which it
increas
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increases
increase
increased
 the
population
 and pollution in our
city
wadea
a person who is under the protection or in the custody of another
ward
.
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.
 Till 1995
wadea
everything that exists anywhere
world
warden
word
 did not face any problem in
electricity but
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electricity, but
 from that time power cuts in different times without any reason because of
high demand
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the high demand
 of
electricity
 that makes
wadia
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Wadia
wood
word
electricity
 company to build new power station to cover the increasing demand of
electricity
. Usually the high
population
is causing
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causes
 an environmental pollution that we are facing it in our days according to research from university of
wadea
 the oxygen present in the
city
 centre has been decreased to 20% less the natural average
that is
 related to congestion
.
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.
 In my opinion the authorities can face
this
 problem by taking serious actions against it
such
 as
population
 redistribution plan in the
city
 centre. Increase
electricity
 bill
lunching
the act of moving a newly built vessel into the water for the first time
launching
 a development plan in
countryside
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the countryside
 that will avoid people to arrive
wadea
take in marriage
wed
,
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,
 reinforced cost guard and border police performance and supply them with appropriate equipment to stop illegal immigration
,
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,
that is
 the solution which I am thinking and I would it will be helpful for the government to take right decisions according to
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
.
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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