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Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business. To what extent do you agree?

#promotion #business
Starting up a
business
 is a hard task to
achieve but
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achieve, but
 keeping it afloat and very successful is even harder. Many people think that the most important ways used to make businesses successful are marketing and promotion of the products or services provided. To a greater extent, I agree with the above statement because of the following reasons. Much as hardworking employees and capital add a great deal to the growth of a company, marketing ensures that the goods or services produced are known by the targeted market.
This
 includes stuff like
advertising
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advertising, for
for
example putting
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example, putting
 up billboards or using television stations. Currently, the youth
use
Suggestion
is using
 the internet more than they watch actual television,
hence
 platforms like Facebook and
twitter
a series of chirps
Twitter
 are ideal methods of advertisement. Promotion of a
business
 not only attracts
consumers but
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consumers, but
also
 employees who might end up boosting its output. It is only logical that the very best or most skilled personnel would prefer to apply to the constantly watched company advertised on television
for example
. A good promoted
business
also
 attracts investors who inject capital
in
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into
 it.
However
, capital is equally important as the keys mentioned
above since
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above, since
 it affects all other aspects. A
business
 will not have effective
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 or even marketing if there is no money to pay for them. Most of the companies that fail due to the fact that they are low on income
that is
 to say bankruptcy. In my opinion as long as capital is available, marketing and promotion can be done. In conclusion, marketing and promotion of a
business
 can not only be done on
media but
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media, but
also
 the owner has to sell himself and the
business
 wherever he goes or whenever he can.
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