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Some people think that the Olympics is no longer important in the 21st century. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Lately, it has been believed by certain people that
Olympics
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the Olympics
has lost
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have lost
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 charm in the 21st century.
This
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 essay disagrees with
this
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 statement as
Olympics
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the Olympics
 is still as relevant as it was earlier.
This
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 essay will
first
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 highlight how
Olympics
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the Olympics
is
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are
 still the most looked after
event
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the event
 for sportsmen throughout the world and
then
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 discuss how
Olympics
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the Olympics
 has provided alternate
career
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 options to many retired sportsmen.
Olympics
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The Olympics
has always been considered
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have always been considered
 as the greatest sporting carnival of all time. It is the dream of most sportsmen to win at least one Olympic medal in their lives. The recognition an Olympic medal brings to the sportsmen is
unmatchable
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. An archer can be ranked
the highest
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higher
the higher
 in
world rankings but
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the world rankings, but
the world rankings but
 he would still desire an Olympic medal. Many sportsmen who have already won an Olympic medal, consider it to be the best highlight of their sporting careers.
For
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instance in
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instance, in
 an interview given to
BBC
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the BBC
, Babita Phogat, a wrestler from India highlighted how winning an Olympic medal actually brought her the satisfaction she desired to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
 since her childhood.
Olympics
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The Olympics
has
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have also provided
also
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 provided an alternate
career
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 to many retired sportsmen. In a survey conducted in the USA, it was deduced that nearly 50-60% of the retired sportsmen had some kind of Sports
acadamies
a secondary school (usually private)
academies
 where they train many potential Olympic medal winners. These retired athletes and sportsmen stay in touch with these sports, shaping the careers of many future winners. They
also
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 do not need to depend on any other source of income after they retire as these
acadamies
associated with academia or an academy
academics
 actually provide them a sustainable source of income. Many retired sportsmen
also
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 make a
career
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 as commentators for live games while many become sports specialists for different media channels providing their valuable insights. To put in a nutshell,
Olympics
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the Olympics
 still as important as it was earlier. It is still the goal of budding sportsmen to win an Olympic medal and the
fame
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
form
 provided by winning an Olympic medal paves an alternate
career
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 path to sportsmen once they decide to retire.
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