Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore, they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Television
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are being used today increasingly to help children acquire knowledge and they are persuaded to use it not only
at
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in
their home but
also
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at their school.
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, I strongly disagree with
this
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and suggest that the children should not be allowed to watch it regularly.
This
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essay provides various reasons regarding its disapproval. The primary reason that the children should not be allowed to watch
television
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daily is that
this
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deteriorates their health. The practice of youngsters viewing
television
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repeatedly makes them passive and lazy.
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, their physical activities would be reduced and it in turn
lead
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leads
them
toward
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to
unhealthy lifestyle
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as obesity which hampers their health.
In addition
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, it has been proven that excessive concentration in a
television
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screen eventually could induce discomforts
such
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as headache and
eye strain
a tiredness of the eyes caused by prolonged close work by a person with an uncorrected vision problem
eyestrain
.
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, if younger population are habituated to
viewing
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view
television
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in a recurring basis
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then
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than
they may familiarize themselves to negative activities.
This
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is because many of the programs
that is
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depicted
in
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on
TV are not youngsters friendly and it
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shows programs those are violent and unethical
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as show related to
robbery
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the robbery
.
This
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could have a negative impact
in
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on
the mind of young ones which is very vulnerable at that age and it
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might encourage them imitate those unwanted things shown
in
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on
TV. In conclusion,
this
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essay suggests that
the young
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younger
students should not be motivated to view
television
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very often due to the negative impact it creates in their health and mind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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