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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#schools #government
Lot
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A lot
 of
school
 in the country
are indulged
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is indulged
 in extra-curricular activities.For these things some private
school
 required extra amount of money from
public sector
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the public sector
 so that our younger
genration
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
 can have
extra amount
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an extra amount
extra amounts
 of resource to be
successfull
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 in
there
of them or themselves
their
 life.
this
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This
 essay will
ellaborate
marked by complexity and richness of detail
elaborate
elaborated
 in details regarding does these
school
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schools
 required additional funding apart from
there
of them or themselves
their
 own resources
.
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.
 Some owned schools have
variety
Suggestion
a variety
 of
fascilities
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
 like gym
,
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,
pool
,
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,
grounds
,
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,
libraries.Apart from that these items don't cover all youth
,
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,
because Not all the students want to be sportsmen or gymnastic player
.
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.
There are other kids who specifically focus on
scientific
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scientifically
 related items and most of the
school
dont
do not
don't
 even have proper scientific or
astro-physical
the branch of astronomy concerned with the physical and chemical properties of celestial bodies
astrophysics
 lab.These are the main concern where
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should intermediate and provide sufficient funds to
school
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the school
schools
.
Furthermore
,
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,
there are not
much
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many
 schools in the world
,
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,
where children are funded by the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 so that they can visit abroad and learn
there
of them or themselves
their
 environment.Unlike japan either private or public
,
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,
all are being funded by the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 to visit other countries so that they can learn
there
of them or themselves
their
 culture and tradition
.
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.
 In
conclusion extra
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conclusion, extra
 amount money to private
school
 always
benefitial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 to pupil considering which side they are heading to as well as it will generate
economical
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economic
 growth to the country
.
Accept space
.
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