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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company.

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Dear Risa Manager, I am writing
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 letter in regard to some time off from work to complete my
certification
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 course in Accounting. As I informed the team earlier my
certification
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 course will be crucial for our upcoming
project
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, I am willing to get 4 days off
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week
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 to complete the
certification
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 exam by the end of
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week
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 so that I can join the team next
week
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 on Monday morning without delay if granted.
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, If I get the opportunity for four days, I will boost myself with fresh knowledge that will lead our next
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's
project
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peak level of success. As I am still wrapping up our
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 Time management
project
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, it's quite overwhelming to be occupied in three different job sectors.
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, as the
certification
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 fee will be covered by the company I am really excited to add the worth of the course in our next
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. I hope you understand and I am looking forward to hearing back from you soon Yours Faithfully, Jeelian

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your letter by ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas transition smoothly between paragraphs.
task achievement
Make sure to use more formal language throughout the letter, especially in the greeting and signing off. It would be more appropriate to address your manager with 'Dear Risa' or 'Dear Ms. [Last Name]'.
task achievement
Your rationale for the time off is clear and demonstrates how the qualification is relevant to your work.
coherence and cohesion
You maintained a polite tone throughout the letter, showing respect for your manager.
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