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Nowadays, environment protection has become major concerned in public. There are some people think that individual person can do nothing to protect the environment its only government and big companies responsibilities to protect the environment and make a difference. I think that every individual do a lot of thing to protect the environment.

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Nowadays, environmental protection has become a major concern for the public. There are some people
that
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 think that individual people can not do very much to protect our
environment
, but that only government and large enterprises can bring about changes I think that every individual can do a lot of
things
 to protect the
environment
.
To begin
, every individual is able to protect the
environment
 by doing small
things
.
In other words
, if everyone saves one paper a day,
then
 billions of
tree
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trees
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 are saved, so it makes a huge difference in
country
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the country
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 to protect
environment
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the environment
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.
However
,
I
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apply
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there are some
things
 that only government and large companies can do as they have the money and resources to do them. The point I am trying to make is that . governments can implement rules, which an individual cannot do, and
also
 ban plastic bags and disposal methods, to protect the
environment
.
In addition
, big companies have the money to run an environmentalist NGO which could do
a lots
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a lot
lots
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of
things
 like planting trees and cleaning public areas like railway stations,
shopping
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and shopping
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 malls and
also
 make people aware of the situation.
To conclude
, it is not only
responsibility
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the responsibility
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for
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of
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government
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the government
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 or big companies to protect the
environment
 but everyone can do lots of
things
 to protect the
environment
 and make our country environmentally friendly
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