Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
Zoos remain popular places for people to visit for entertainment and to learn about wild animals.
Although
some people are of the opinion that zoos can provide a sanctuary for endangered animals and so should be kept open, I believe that the cruelty that animals suffer outweighs this
benefit, and that they should be shut down.
These days, animals are under threat from humans in many ways, seen
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the way that their habitats are being destroyed through the cutting down of rain forests, or through poaching. Following on from Accept comma addition
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, the argument is that zoos can protect some of these animals that are under threat. The reason is that they are in a safe environment managed by trained staff who can ensure the animals are looked after and can produce offspring. There are examples of successes in this
respect, such
as with Pandas, which have been endangered for many years but have been protected.
However
, there are more convincing arguments for why zoos should be shut down. Firstly
, even though some species are under threat, there are lots of animals which do not fall into this
category and who are there just for the entertainment of visitors. While it may be fun and educational to see them, animals are not meant to be caged, and their distress can often be seen in the way many of them pace back and forwards all day. Not only this
, if the prime reason of zoos is to protect animals, this
could be done in other environments such
as wild life
parks where the animals have more freedom.
In conclusion, animals should be all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
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does not have to be in zoos. Zoos are cruel to animals, not similar enough to their natural habitat, and they should be closed down. Submitted by linleeyeachiu on
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- thirdly
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- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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