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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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If you are in a
country
 where
one
 can'
t
 communicate properly can be problematic. There are social and practical problems attached to it. Adaptation and preparation are the key before moving to a specific place on earth. If someone moves to a
country
, where
one
 can'
t
 properly understand the
language
 spoken there, it becomes difficult to live a healthy social life, e.g.
getting
Suggestion
Getting
 involved in social gatherings becomes frustrating,
one
 can'
t
 properly get to understand humans, can'
t
 develop friendships, which leads to seclusion kind of. It is like listening to music without understanding its lyrics. You may like the music at times, but what’s the point if
one
 can’
t
 get the message embedded in a song. In
this
 age of technology, almost everything is digital, which requires the use of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, if a certain
country
 has a specific
language
 for internet affairs, without knowing that means of communication can leave
one
 far behind in terms of progress as well in day to day life. 

 I believe before moving to a specific place on earth,
one
 should prepare to adapt. The preparation consists of learning the specific
language
 spoken by the majority in that
country
.
For example
,
one
 should take admission in coaching classes, which are in abundance nowadays, which can be a solid preparatory step. 

I agree with the notion that by speaking a different
language
 can lead to many issues, for which preparation for adaptation is must beforehand,
other wise
in other respects or ways
otherwise
 issues galore.
Submitted by Sohrab Mushtaq on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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