Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think that this is fully justified while others think that it is unfair. Discus both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#sports #professionals #money #people #professions #discus

It is commonly believed by some that athletes who are successful in their career, can make

hefty amount

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a hefty amount

compare

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comparisons

compared

to the professionals in other significant occupations, while, others think it is unjust. In my opinion, the degree of efforts contributed by sportsmen in terms of physical activity, mental strength and consistency make it reasonable to attain high earnings.

Firstly

, selecting sports as career makes them to involve into

high level

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high levels

a high level

of physical workout. They have to go through massive competition and sustaining at

such

tough times makes them stand apart from other careers as they represent a country in international events.

Secondly

, sports professionals put their whole life

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stake by choosing

such

a volatile profession in which there is less security for the future as compare

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with

other occupations.

For instance

, an athlete is only considered to be a part of the team

untill

up to, before the time

until

his performance is going

good

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well

, which clearly shows that they are real risk takers.

On the other hand

, it is completely true that they don’t contribute much socially as professional from other fields like doctors and scientists do. Doctors treat people give their services for

humanity

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humanists

and scientists

also

contribute through their inventions.

Smooth running

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The smooth running

of any locality is difficult without them.

Furthermore

, if we count the social efforts contributed by people in these

profession

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professions

is far more than an athlete. To conclude,

however

, if we consider the social contribution made by professionals in other fields, they definitely deserve a high emoluments but sports professionals

also

bring name and fame to country at international level so they worth it.

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